Ruddy Landry-Paulino
English 110
Journal 1
9/3/18
Welcome Mr. Wallace thank you for coming to my classroom. The kids and I have a few questions for you about your novel Consider The Lobster. One question, in particular, we all came up with is what started this topic? How come this came up in your thoughts? I mean I can see your point of view just in other situations such as endangered animals or even animal cruelty. Some questions the kids could have are what’s so different about lobsters?
Journal 2
My experience with drafting a writing project isn’t the best because I’m not a strong writer at all. My method for trying to write a good project is to collect all the data I need to make this project successful. First I would start with making a food web putting the main idea in the middle, then questions around the main idea, and after that, I would look up two answers for each of those questions. After finding all the information I need I will start my project rough draft. Two hours later and my draft should be done 3 pages long or more. Once finished I would revise my pieces myself first reading it out loud correcting any errors. Usually once completing my revision I would have a fellow peer read it and make comments about any other necessary changes. Also, I would ask questions and pick at their brain a little to see what they are asking of me. Sadly this usually never works out in my favor and I somehow still end up with a mediocre piece of writing that could use quite a bit of work. I’m also terrible at taking a lot of negative feedback because it just sucks to think you have put all this work into something, for it to be mediocre. But I just need to butt up and go back to the drawing board. To help create a masterpiece to hopefully knock the socks of the teacher.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 3
Prof. Jesse
In the reading, I have learned how to optimize my quoting for an essay so that I don’t leave the reader hanging or questioning the quotes I put in my essay’s. During the reading what caught my eye, the most were the fact that “ people don’t understand what they’ve quoted” well I disagree with that because if some writing an essay or an open response why would they quote something they don’t understand. Usually, they quote something they have either research or have read about. What I did find helpful was they showed us was to ease them into our response so if you are struggling don’t there are ways for you to be able to have a flowing paragraph that flows. As GG and CB said “lead-in claims should explain who is speaking and set up what the quotation says”, basically don’t leave the quote unexplained toughly but don’t over-explain because either way, you could mess up the prompt your writing. I also learned that template before the quote is also relevant because having a lead-in that will interest the reader more makes the paper that much better. Also, make sure when introducing you add some excitement to the beginning because that will also help assist in bringing the reader’s attention closer.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 4
9/13/18
Eng-110
Prof Jesse
After reading “ The End Of Food” by Lizzie Widdicombe, I wish to share with you what the text was all about. In the reading Lizzie gave some major points of why this was the end to food and how it all began over some simple money issues. The person she did her research on was a technology major from the California area. He started out trying to make a app for phones, while making the app he slowly ran out of money to support himself and his food cost. So his brain started thinking and out popped the idea of substituting food with a supplement you could say. Once the product was done he ran test on himself and found that the supplement would fill you and keep you full for a long period of time. After finding that the product was good to go he marketed it hitting his goal within hours of putting it on the market. Sooner than later he finds that his product Soylent was becoming popular because of the way it helped people lose weight but also gain back body attributes like tight and toned physique. After a year of sales Rob Rhinehart was trying to move the product on to bigger better things like replacing all food industry’s a big one was getting rid of farming but that not all he also wanted to create a bacteria that would use natural photosynthesis to make the food for people to eat. As Lizzie researched she conclude that “ Soylent dream is a strange one .. that its hopes mingle with our nightmares” , which tells me as the reader I don’t think I’ll be messing with Soylent anytime soon.
While reading and annotating this response I definitely had some mixed feeling but conclude with one in particular, which is I’m really not agreeing with the whole replacing food for a “gooey lemonade” doesn’t sound to appetizing to me. One reason I had mixed feelings about it was, first I’m definitely a cheap person so finding ways to reduce cost are always an option for me because going from a cost of say 200 dollars a month to 25 would be a life changer. After getting deeper into the texted I realized that using Soylent meant you don’t get the same sensations for foods such as mouth watering, the site of the food or even the smell instead you look at this clear water bottle instead with that weird looking substance in it. Also I wouldn’t be able to handle the fact that it could potentially ruin my social life as a student. When Lizzie and Rhinehart went to a college campus because they heard that student were actually using it and they wanted to know if there “ had been any social repercussions from their use of Soylent”which they said there were. They said that first weeks always the worst one on campus, because Erin one of the students said “ So the first week can be pretty bad,because you fart pretty bad” that’s a problem right there I’m not one to be very secluded so the fact that would have to be so I didn’t embarrass myself is a no go for me instantly. After completing my reading of “ The End Of Food” I definitely appreciate real food more so if you don’t mind I’m going to go eat some real tender juicy steak right now. Adios!
Ruddy Landry Paulino
9/18/18
Eng110
Prof. Jesse
Journal 5
When assessing the prompt I have made connections on what would make more sensing using to make the prompt you write interesting. I really liked when the author was talking about how you need to sometimes plagiarize but just make it in your own words so that the reader can see the point you’re making and not leave them with questions afterwards. They say that disagreeing is okay but make your point not disagreeable, but my view is how could you do that if they turn that against you. I really like the fact that they always give us templates with every point they make when stating something new to you for instant “ While I understand the impulse to____, my own view is______” this makes it easier to know that we have a resource to look back at for future reference. Also when reading I like how in the beginning they make it seem like writings a chess game and once you have done all the moves you prepare. Then think or strategize your plan to capture the king but never forget the unexpected bumps that could occur doing your attack at this game. It almost make sense thinking about the prompt as a chess game because once all the pieces lined up and your last move makes the prompt solid.
Ruddy Landry-Paulino
Journal 6
English 110
2 Copy of Kayla Lowe Peer Review 1
2 Naomi-Paper 1 Draft 2 – Naomi (1)
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Eng 110-H2
Journal 7
Ruddy Landry-Paulino
Eng 110-H2
Journal 8
During my reading I realized that some of my essay relates to this topic our teacher had us read. During the reading they talk about how when going to present or make an essay to make sure that whatever you make is understand by the reader. If not the audience or reader is going to have a hard time understanding what this whole topics about and be left with a gruesome amount of questions. I really like that they tell you what people expect from you in your writing and how to detail your writing to interest the reader to what your explaining. I also like the fact that they bring in a lot of helpful facts about how to introduce what “they say” so that the readers attention is sucked into your vortex of information and view. This book is also full of amazing facts on basically everything you need to make your essays somewhat decent. It also is almost like they go with what we talk about in class because I feel that are professor was just saying something like this such as “ make sure you bodys tie in with your thesis”. Which will strengthen your essay making it very informational and clarify your point of view. Don’t be afraid to use these methods any they suggest to you because the only want t see you succeed through writing. It also shows example or aas they call them “ templates” of how to set this up so that you wouldn’t mess up trying on your own. TS/IS is amazing book to look into I highly suggest if your not a strong writer like me because this will help show you the ways of the world in writing a decent college essay.
Ruddy Landry-Paulino
Journal 9
During my revise portion I overcame some hurdles that my paper threw at me or I should say I threw at myself. I spent the most time going through putting the paper in order. For example I didn’t have a proper conclusion so I fixed that by adding more details to the conclusion. Even though this took me awhile I wish I would have spread this throughout more days then just one and given myself more time. When going through this extensive process I realized that this was a whole new ballpark for me to play with since my revising process was never the same during my other years of schooling. I felt that with the revising process we are given now is way more extensive than what I had before. I approached it thinking I need to just take this day by day and not to over stress myself but like usual I over stressed and would tweak out about certain things. So hopefully next time I won’t be so hard on myself and take this process of revising with an open mind.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 10
Eng110-H2
On page four of the prompt, I agree/disagree with the first and the second paragraph. It makes sense that the decline in cooking is because everyone’s working in. Plus the if the wife is working usually the man doesn’t cook, which leads to a decline of cooking itself. Which some people is a blessing but I don’t believe that people shouldn’t lose the ability to cook because cooking is an essential aspect to life such as camping, grilling or baking. I do agree with the fact that watching people cook is fun but it shouldn’t take away from the fact that people need to cook instead of fast food. Think of the people that just instead of cooking will bring precooked meals to work like Tostitos or McDonalds. Which we have noticed the difference with it this precooked or fast food cooked meals because they have stats showing that we have lost a lot of our ability to cook real meals. Since we just use the artificial version of the meal so ts quicker to pleasing people.
Page eight I want to know why if they believe the food networks causing us to lose the ability to cook, why keep airing it? Most of the talk in this prompt is about how cookings being lost to the fact that we watch it more or prefer people “ 16-year-old burger flippers” to cook for us instead of making it our self. Which people should see this because this means that people spend more and lose more culture too because not only will spend more on fast food too but they won’t have the sit down with family. Since it’s just a grab and goes meal for them to deal with. Just think of how much money fast food makes off of people that just decide to go then their own house to cook. It’s a multimillion dollar company that you don’t do much but provide nasty food that full of unhealthy products that appeal to people’s taste buds.
On eleven I want to talk about how we are so spoiled and we are just getting lazier. One point they bring up is the fact that if someone was to create an actual food network commercial that we wouldn’t watch it because it won’t interest the fact that people could be doing something else besides the fact of watching real cooking. Instead, we decide to just go on and make some processed food like french fries, Oreos, or just to go out to a restaurant for someone else to cook for are a lazy world. I feel that the world just keeps getting complicated, for the fact that we make everything easy for ourselves. Just think when you look at the tv you don’t see ads saying good ways to cook you just see restaurants driving us to go out and eat there. I feel that not only is it agreeable you could feel that it’s complicated because their benefits to the fact that going out do other things than just replace cooking it brings people together like socializing like college. In college, a lot of students just go to the dining hall to eat instead of cooking in their dorm.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Eng110-H2
Journal 11
What helps motivate a writer? When your writing about other writers view on something you want to make sure you understand what your talking about. Going through the piece you want to not only find the thesis but also make sure you understand the prompt your talking about. Put this writing in your own words so that you can build a bridge to your writing so it’s easier when you get to the prompt. Make sure it makes sense to you so that when your arguing your point you mistakenly go off path. Another way to consider helping yourself when reviewing a piece is to isolate parts of the text that will help you to clearly to write your side to of the point. Also take personal responsibility when when stand for your point don’t just back away when someone challenges. Just make sure when you stand your ground you have the evidence to back you up in your claim. Always let your ideas take you outside the text so that you can broaden the playing field for the readers.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 12
Caitlyn Doughty believes that the issues with cremation is that there’s no real emotional impact or a huge ritual behind it. Before she started her views were way different. She viewed this as a beautiful part taking of nature and thought it would be more celebratory but comes to find out it’s not. She implies that it’s not a beautiful sight to see because usually it’s just her and the body. She usually the last to person the body see before it’s sent into the machine to be cremated. Which she believes to be sad because her thoughts on this is that the family should at least be their to say their last goodbyes and even send the body into the incinerator out of respect for the person. She just feels that it should be witnessed and take more effort for it because this person has been lost in the community. She also believes that we should almost make this like a huge celebration of life.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 13
In the life span of paper two I felt that I took actions on something and didn’t really on others. During the duration of paper two I should have used my free time wisely because I felt that my revision process was a little weak and could have been utilized more. I also felt that made some strong efforts on this paper to correct some of the errors I had on paper one. I feel that connected the text a bit better and not only that but I felt a bit of confidences this round. I feel that I am getting the hang of this whole writing process. But I still definitely need help. I felt that I did good on proving the point I was trying to prove in paper two. It definitely had some strong points but it will still have it’s weaknesses. All around I feel confident with paper two but I know I need to use my time wisely.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 14
My thought has changed ever since we first read about David Foster Wallace. What comes to mind now is that what makes treating animals different from one another based on relationships with them? Lobsters have a unique character but very conceptual point. How would we feel being boiled? Because I know for sure I wouldn’t like to be boiled. Is are practices done based on the fact that we don’t care and are selfish or is it just because we can detach are feeling from the savagery nature we came from? What I feel that keeps me in the middle of all this is the fact that some killing is okay but other should be more justified. For instances, the raising and killing of livestock is that okay? As humans, we see this as a source of survival so yeah we justify that fact that we have to do this for ourselves. Selfish that humans are, selfish inconsiderate of anything but ourselves. I just feel that I can’t explain the feelings that arise but also I do in some ways.
Ruddy Landry-Paulino
Journal 15
When people are to give up meat there’s a sense of losing the family culture or the memories of the grandmother cooking her amazing meals. Giving up meat would make the person feel that they lose a sense of their childhood taste for food and craving for the delicious taste that comes from meat. When Foer talks about the cultural loss he means the loss of not only meat but the memories that associate with it so for instance when i talk about my grandmother cooking and how well it taste meats are obviously involved. If you were to talk away that factor how would you associate those memories, if the one factor is taken away.
When he presented these questions I was confused how couldn’t you argue your point in being vegetarian. I feel that when you want something to change or be done you need to stand your ground and back it up. But with this topic it’s hard because their a happy middle you feel sometimes and other times you can see the better cause and effect it has changing your style up. For instants I can see why he would want be vegan because it keeps from giving to farming that just hurts the animals but I can also argue the fact that without meat your diet would be bland. Meat brings a lot of cultural values such as the different ways they are cooked and prepared or the style and texture of the meat after words. It’s basically all on preference and there’s no right or wrongs to the way you eat it’s just something we have to do to survive.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 16
In TS/IS the author brings to point that you need to incorporate what people will try and say that goes against your argument. They also speak about how once the flow of writing becomes easier so won’t the point you make in the arguments your supporting. When supporting your argument make sure to include the naysayers in it so that they can’t argument against it because you already new what they were going to say. Also try including them in the piece as supporting textual evidence because by doing that you get right to the skeptics voice. By broadening your view of the paper not just to yourself but others makes the argument open to the minds of others too. The incorporation of naysayers is most beneficial to proving the point you have so when time comes your papers fully loaded and ready to fire.
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 17
Ruddy Landry Paulino
Journal 18
Through the revising process of project 3 i have come to conclude that I have done some good work here I say. I feel that I have spent a lot of time working and fixing the project so that my teacher can see the progress of my writing. This time I spent a lot of time working on it. I feel that I thought this out a lot and what I wrote has a lot back up to it so that my point comes across to the reader. My writing has very much improved especially context wise I have been able to pull and analyze the text better. I feel some work I can still improve upon is tying the text together and making support for it. I also need help opening on harder work so that I can make sure I can make body paragraphs for it. Also it’s hard to find support some times or the right quote. Honestly I feel that i have improved greatly thank to have peer reviews and mywritinglab.
